You leave me in fragments
Which you plan from the start
So I will paint a perfect portrait
Write you into an art
Dip this pen into the black hole
That I now call my heart
And present you to the world
To judge and rip apart
β₯
You scream don’t look
You scream don’t touch
Photo Credit: Jubriel
Wow π
Meow >^.^<
Plastic flowers on the way my friend..
Yay!!
You will have them now π
I don’t see them *gets fishing rod ready*
Check ur mail π
Oh, lol. *puts fishing rod away*
Thank you ^_^
You are welcome π
Quite simply beautiful and stunning!
Thank you Darren π
Love this one….a great fragment…really good.
Suzy and I were talking fragments last night, and I believe we did as well. Just jotting down thoughts and trying to piece it all together. I wanted to keep it brief because adding more to it would take away some of its intensity.
it is beautiful Brit. really. And I love fragments….they add up to more than the whole. the intensity is important too….
As if it were up to me….I sound like such a dick…just saying I like it…
LOL! Hardly John.
I do like it….love it in fact…
Yikes! This is really quite excellent but I kind of miss the fun poems, lol. Oh well you know me.
The fun poems had their turn π
This was an awesome in-your-face short poem. I read it a few times actually π
Short and to the point, like me, lol… juuuust kidding. Maybe π
That’s powerful.
Something I felt briefly this week, but the rage quickly subsided. Still, I wanted to put it up because I’m not always cheerful all the time and these poems mirror certain events in my life.
We all have darkness inside of us. For some of us it’s brief, and others it’s deeper. I consider myself a pretty dark person most of the time, and people tend not to see it, so either I hide it really well (which would be odd since I’m not that kind of person) or people think I’m just being funny.
Embracing every side of yourself is part of what makes you so incredibly talented. You should be working towards putting together a book of your poetry. Even if it’s a side gig, you’ll still get the satisfaction of seeing is succeed.
The power of the pen! This is excellent! π Short but very powerful – and what a warning!! I still haven’t succeeded in short power poems yet! And pens can be very dangerous – or lovely, depending on how they are used, and what kind of picture they paint! π
I was writing a novel some time ago now, I haven’t given up on it – just a bit distracted this last year with the internet being new to me! One of the characters was not unlike my ex! But – don’t tell anyone, will you!!! π I’m sure that has been done many times in books! Funny thing is, when I really got down to writing about that man, I found I couldn’t visualize anything about him from my ex partner, and I found that a real surprise. I realized that it didn’t always work, to try and put the reality of a real person into a fictional character. I had to start from the beginning with his character and modify him as to what kind of person would my main female character have chosen. It really does get that weird, those characters end up with lifelike personalities of their own, otherwise they would be cardboard cut outs of reality – and would be a real embarrassment. I’m sure literary agents bins must be full of those manuscripts!
So I found my poison pen had a mind of it’s own. π¦ I remember seeing interviews with various authors when I was a teenager, who said something about how the characters dictated to them how they were written. And I just thought they were mad! π― Just reveals how we need to walk in another’s shoes a little, before deciding they might be insane! π
LOL! I won’t tell a soul Suzy π That’s strange, especially since you had been with him for so long. Most of my writing here is an adaption of two men in my life – both exes, both of which are my friends at this point. Sometimes it seems as if I’m bipolar on my feeling towards the character – it is because there are two different players and I write about each but don’t distinguish who’s who most of the time. I’m not even sure if they realize it when they read my blog π
You know… I don’t get possessed by the pen. I’ve seen many bloggers/authors write about it, but it has never happened to me. I wish it did because it would make the thought process easier – to be dictated then to draw the characters out on your own. ^_^
love this!
Thank you Joseph ^_^
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Thanks!!
Hi J, thank you!
Yay!
Why is a raven like a writing desk? Will we ever know? Is there an answer?
Hmm… Perhaps you should ask that particular riddle to a certain someone you are crushing on. If he answers correctly, then he’s a keeper π
If only they knew.
even the mona lisa
is falling apart
~
chuck palahniuk
(fight club)
~
your poem
echoed these words
in my head
shhhh tyler durden
I had to look up that quote. Apparently I do not watch enough movies, and apparently people like using that line as a title for songs π
And I listened to those songs… they were not enjoyable or I’d share them with you here.
never heard
any songs
~
probably saw the movie
fifteen years ago
or so
~
lot of interesting quotes
I still remember
that’s a masterpiece brit..!! dip this pen into the black hole and then finish with to judge and rip apart. that’s a start to the finish and with the line having to hold up. it does here…:))
Thank you Don π
Nice!!!!
Thank you ^_^